The kill

[thaphantom]

Either i'm Snapping-your-neck.
Or just asking-for-respect.
While i'm attacking-her-chest.
What will she be askin-for-next.
I took your girl just like i'm taking-your-life.
A armor not fit so she's mistaking-her-knight.
you'd Come up to me with a knife, I only do Gun-play.
Verbally i'd just end you right there's only one-way.
Well some-day, you'll see that i'm more-than-what-you-think.
Smashing your cranium with just my fore-hand-possibly.
I'm snapping-your-neck, then soon cracking-your-vets.
yes, i'm lyrically on point what are you asking-for-next.
I can either crack-ya-neck, splash-the-tech, or just discombobulate your dome.
Or just blast-ya-chest, ask-what's-next, and i'll be the sniper at your home.

Quick freestyle im in my first period class.sleepy cause these sinus pills...just took a test...yeah im bored anyways...post what ya feel....

[Khan]

very good on your multis, I'm impressed i didn't think you could write like this.

every drop you do, there is improvement, now i will point one thing out to you.

Well some-day, you'll see that i'm more-than-what-you-think.
"""Smashing your cranium with just my fore-hand-possibly""".
I'm snapping-your-neck, then soon cracking-your-vets.

The line with the 3""",Where you said "Fore-Hand-Possibly". Now the only problem i see, is that you didn't rhyme anything with that multis.
that is really the only problem i see, now i would have pointed out that you said crack-ya-neck, alot, but you always had something new to say afterwards so it wasn't that big of a deal, but other then that, like i said, i like it, this is probly one of my favorite pieces done by you.

Keep Up The Good Work.

[thaphantom]

the word possibly i ryhmed it slow...i said it slower like u could hear it verbally you would understand....

more-than-what-you-think
fore-hand-pos-eh-ble

i dunno i cant explain through text you know

[Khan]

its straight, there is a way to say some word and make them rhyme so thats what you probly did here, but by reading it, you couldnt tell lol still good job.

[thaphantom]

lol thanks...uppin for more feed..anyone?

[Khan]

hit me with some feed, asshole..lol Fighting? go check that out.

[-TraMaTiK-]

not bad,like Khan said that one line in particular doesnt reallyyy fit the way u hoped but i guess if u can make it work more power to u..newayz wasnt bad but it wasnt really eye catchin either 2 me,u got some skills keep@it

[complexity]

"A armor not fit so she's mistaking-her-knight. "

That was the nicest line.

"I can either crack-ya-neck, splash-the-tech, or just discombobulate your dome.
Or just blast-ya-chest, ask-what's-next, and i'll be the sniper at your home. "

this was interesting

Overall, not horrible, keep it up.

[~Symbolikull~]

first off multies were not good at all, flow was choppy as fuck, you repeated yourself way to much, and rhyme scheme is too basic idk i wasnt really feelin this drop i personally thing you may have taken a step back on this one.

[thaphantom]

wasn't trying to force nothin' you know but thanks for the feed uppin for more feed....people have good days and bad days you know? and you might as well say i was high off this sinus pill cause damn i was sleepy and hungry as fuck

[Cee4]

yeah most off the multis were off. nothin special but overall it was alrite for a quick drop.

[thaphantom]

thanks for the feed...i appreciate it...still uppin for more feed though...go check out my other posts in scipts and leave comments if u haven't already..