Wild Bill, TGYH & Tram - Livin Tha Dream Part 2

[Omega Bill]

Bill - 1st and 3rd Verse
TGYH - 2nd verse
Tramatik - 4th verse

Part 3 will be next. Yet again, I play the narrator, TGYH plays Brian, the main character, and a new character is introduced through Tramatik. You dont know much about him yet but the whole story comes full circle in the 3rd part. The funny thing is my first verse was pre-written when TGYH and I started this, so the flows off, and the 3rd verse I did today after I found my writing niche, HUGE difference, hahahaha.

Link to Live Tha Dream 1 - willd-bill-tgyh-livin-tha-dream-vt7929.html


Rome is gone, the big brother has fallen, and now Brian stares at his mom ballin
Ive watched this happen a lot to poor Brian, but Ive never seen him lay in a corner cryin
Maybe he'll learn that life is worth livin, it aint about dyin, but he cant leave hes too tied in
Ive seen this kid grow up with no father, all he had was his blue collar mom held down by bias
And he watched his big brother playin ball in the park get approached by niggas sayin "try this"
Life in hospitals is nothing new, he lost his little buddy Jax, but his parents he could never meet them
Because Jax used to come to school to bruises, and he died of internal bleeding cuz his father used to beat him
Now hes stuck in lifes struggle, lose the dope, lose the rep and try to grow up into being a good man?
All I know is that Brian has to make his decision quick, cause he doesnt know whos creepin in that blue van

i Thought This Was Life But Now Rome is Gone And Moms is Still Cryin
Sick Of Comin Home Late Moms Ask Where i Been An i'm Still Lyin
i Aint Been Playin Tha Game Long But it's Time i Change Tha Game Plan
Ever Since My Brothers Been Gone i Swear Ta God i Feel Like A Changed Man
Every Hustle That i Spot Makes Me Put A Little Less Muscle in Tha Rock
Every Time i Pitch it Seems Like it Brings Another Tussle To Tha Block
Moms Always Cryin She Prayin Ta God Every Day Hopin i Stop This
Walkin To Tha Corner i Met Homie An Told Him Tha Plan Then He Got Pissed
Fam Dont Understand That i'm Leavin Tha Spot i'm Leavin Tha Game
This Shit Sickens Me i Always Witness Tha Fiends Breathin Tha Caine
i Tried Tellin Moms And She Told Me i'm Tha Reason He Aint Breathin
Homie Dedicated His Own Life And i'm Tha Reason!? Fuck This i'm Leavin

Leave the block, thats a quick way to get knocked and have ya heart get stopped
Get popped, in the back of the head, listen to your heart Brian, not your head
Ya brothers dead, its time for you to walk, you're 16 its time to leave the block
Time to leave the rocks, in fronta you on the ground, walk away, whats that sound?
Sound of a pound of crack gettin stolen, by the fiend on the corner who thinks hes rollin
Thinks he golden, when he just an addict, look at these peoples eyes man its some sad shit
This is a bad trip, we needa get placed, somewhere far away before we get sprayed and aced
Laid to rest with a hole in ya chest, dent in ya vest and another line erased from his families crest
Some are the best, and the Don dont like quitters, he needs hardcore homies who dont get the jitters
Who dont shake nor shiver, doesnt step in but Brians bout to leave, time for the given to be the giver

from a distance i see em raid the block
tryna evade the cops cuz they blades iz hot
meanin the lil thugs who be tradin shots
hustlin,dealin cuz there afraid'ta stop
but me im'a veteran ta these streets
somethin like medicine 4 these freaks
carryin somethin alot better then heat
my minds the weapon thats never asleep
yet these kids thinkin they own it all
just cuz they run around never home at all
its a block filled with murder,rape n shit
stay as long they want they aint escapin it

[WILDBILLISAGUIDOFAGGIT]

First of all let me say nice piece. Each had a solid drop... Bill your shit was good but at times it seemed to much like you were talking about it, instead of rapping about it. Maybe for a topic like this the rhyme scheme needs to get a little more tact. #2 verse wasn't bad either. Only thing I would like to caution is, some lines seemed a little sloppy. You can get a little further into the story mode then you did. Tramatiks your verse was one of the weaker ones. It wasn't as true to the topic, but the flow was cool.

[Omega Bill]

Thanks for the feed man. It's much appreciated.

[Haz]

Im Sorry Assholez
I've Been Busy Aint get to Leave This long ass Piece Feed!
but Let Me Geeeet 2 it!!!


Bill Bars:


Maybe he'll learn that life is worth livin, it aint about dyin, but he cant leave hes too tied in < 1st
Ive seen this kid grow up with no father, all he had was his blue collar mom held down by bias
And he watched his big brother playin ball in the park get approached by niggas sayin "try this"

i Liked how you Flowed this first Bar together, than Continued to expand the Storyline

Because Jax used to come to school to bruises, and he died of internal bleeding cuz his father used to beat him < Good Shit, Alott of Emotion Brought in This Bar & Some People Can Relate


Now hes stuck in lifes struggle, lose the dope, lose the rep and try to grow up into being a good man?
All I know is that Brian has to make his decision quick, cause he doesnt know whos creepin in that blue van

SUSPENSE!! .. i like how you closed this With Suspense & Den TheGuy Follows you Up

TheGuy Bars:

i Aint Been Playin Tha Game Long But it's Time i Change Tha Game Plan
Ever Since My Brothers Been Gone i Swear Ta God i Feel Like A Changed Man

^ i Liked how you Brought the Changes feeling To this Bar Niggah.


Every Hustle That i Spot Makes Me Put A Little Less Muscle in Tha Rock
Every Time i Pitch it Seems Like it Brings Another Tussle To Tha Block << Tru Dat..

More Money More Problems Concept Bein Put Into Play Here


Moms Always Cryin She Prayin Ta God Every Day Hopin i Stop This
Walkin To Tha Corner i Met Homie An Told Him Tha Plan Then He Got Pissed
Fam Dont Understand That i'm Leavin Tha Spot i'm Leavin Tha Game
This Shit Sickens Me i Always Witness Tha Fiends Breathin Tha Caine <-- Good Way 2 Put the Whole
Situation
i Tried Tellin Moms And She Told Me i'm Tha Reason He Aint Breathin
Homie Dedicated His Own Life And i'm Tha Reason!? Fuck This i'm Leavin << Love The Last Line!

Cause its Sooo Real & So Raw in That Sense..


More Bill Bars :


Leave the block, thats a quick way to get knocked and have ya heart get stopped
Get popped, in the back of the head, listen to your heart Brian, not your head

^ Haha Slick Lil Shit Wit Dat Use ya Heart not ya Head

Ya brothers dead, its time for you to walk, you're 16 its time to leave the block < can Relate
Time to leave the rocks, in fronta you on the ground, walk away, whats that sound?

^ Sorta Sounds like a Mom Talkin To ha 16 Year Old if she Cares lol


Some are the best, and the Don dont like quitters, he needs hardcore homies who dont get the jitters
Who dont shake nor shiver, doesnt step in but Brians bout to leave, time for the given to be the giver

^ Solid Bar to End this your Second Verse


Matik Bars :

from a distance i see em raid the block
tryna evade the cops cuz they blades iz hot
meanin the lil thugs who be tradin shots
hustlin,dealin cuz there afraid'ta stop < Nice How u Put The Whole Concept into Play From a
Different Perspective




carryin somethin alot better then heat
my minds the weapon thats never asleep
yet these kids thinkin they own it all
just cuz they run around never home at all <<< loved this Lil Part of the Piece son

My Minds a Weapon Dat Neva Sleeps. GOOD SHIT! lol

good Way to Follow it up Wid Own it all & Aint Home At All

its a block filled with murder,rape n shit
stay as long they want they aint escapin it < Solid Bar To Ennnnd it!


Overrall Piece

Was Solid, Everyone Put there Roles into Play Nasty..

u Niggahz Did Yall Thingz Wid Dis Piece.. Let Me in On 3 !! lol just Playin u got 2 Many people..

Bill u Did Good As Storyteller
u Didnt Mislead Me 2 Thinkin u Wus Some1 Else

Jj u Dida Great Job Wid Playin Da Role of Dat Niggah
& How u Made it Seem like u Wus Really talkin to ya Mom Etc..

& Matik u Went Bananaz Wid Da Multis & How Much Emotion u Brought in
But u Still Played ya Role Right & Dats Wud Makes a Piece Great

Overrall i Liked This Shit Homies
I Know No1 Left Yall Feed But i Did Some Bar Fa Bar Shit & Took My Time
So Appreciate it!! Lol

Stay Up & Stay Active

[Omega Bill]

Definetley appreciate that detailed feed Haz. Thanks.

[Panama]

yeah, all the verses are good... good job to all... Bill only problem I got is you need to shorten your lines some..

Seems a little stretched in some areas you got a shaky structure right now...

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that I would suggest workin on... but as far as the lyrics , you did a good job getting your point across... a couple decent multies... but good job puttin your story together....

TGYH... good structure... good flow... you painted your story pretty well too.. props....

And Tramatic... man you got a structure that's really good for audio... your multies could use some work... but I'm still feelin it... good shit man..

So in conclusion... good job to all of you... stay up...

[Omega Bill]

Panama - Yeah its my downfall, my structure and hyper-extension are a problem. Still workin on it.

Thanks for the feed. It's appreciated. I'll be sure to leave feed on the piece you dropped. I glanced at it earlier when I didn't have time and it looked good.

TGYH will probably leave feed too, we leave feed on everything, haha.