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im at a Skitsa.State voice in my head Mista skates
the demon Go's in Circles like its Sumthin a Twista Ate
when i say i Feel somethin i Re-furr-ta-pain
i Knew a Fiend wena "Worri Came" she said "HURRY CANE"
Livin in a nitemare wusnt SCURRY MAYNE she "blew past" like a HURRI CANE
the Habit wouldnt End-or-flee no1 wus a friend-2-she she Kill't ha Mem-a-ree..
so when i Said rememba Me? i thought u hada "futcha ahead?" coke suit cha instead?
is that the "naked Truth" you wanna "Pay fa blow" so u Wan me 2 "Loot Cha fa Head?"
chill and just hand-me-the-money im just like "Addition study guides" hand-e-wid-sum-see
this i ain "Fillin-see" who im "dillin-2" cus 2 be honest gurl its "Killin-Me" 2 Be "Killin you"
she replied :

"This Makes me More "Alive Den Ever" im Always in the Storm & "Survive the Weather"
Im Living Good With Cane i "Strive For Better" So In a Lap Know i'll "Dive For Chetter"

you siq cock? for some "sick stock?" you got 2 much time at hands
what Happens wen da clocks Doesnt "Tick Tock" & u fly Away like a quick flock???

Im Going to Hell i'll Doubt-i'll-Sore i'll Suck Dick 4 it Till My Mouth-Is-Sore
i jus Did 3.5 Outta-Four im Out-Fa-More Fuck You Nigga im Out-Da-Door
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Post by Prophet »

Pretty good, I enjoyed this piece. Like TGYH there was a lotta piece I was feeling the sum see line lol. Flow was on point as well, pretty much everything was on point.

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when i say i Feel somethin i Re-furr-ta-pain
i Knew a Fiend wena "Worri Came" she said "HURRY CANE"
Livin in a nitemare wusnt SCURRY MAYNE she "blew past" like a HURRI CANE

so when i Said rememba Me? i thought u hada "futcha ahead?" coke suit cha instead?
is that the "naked Truth" you wanna "Pay fa blow" so u Wan me 2 "Loot Cha fa Head?"

"This Makes me More "Alive Den Ever" im Always in the Storm & "Survive the Weather"
Im Living Good With Cane i "Strive For Better" So In a Lap Know i'll "Dive For Chetter"
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Post by snowgoon »

you show alot of flexiblility with words, it was creative as hell too duke,
you also got an gutta/abstract flow which kind've makes it hard to read at first, which i can relate too, but once you read it, it was worth it

personal fav bars:

"This Makes me More "Alive Den Ever" im Always in the Storm & "Survive the Weather"
Im Living Good With Cane i "Strive For Better" So In a Lap Know i'll "Dive For Chetter"
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Thanks Alot Fa Da Feed Homies
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Post by Arvincible »

lol niccce

I liked the references to the newbies in this site, really creative.
Good read man, keep it comin.
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