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Cee4
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My punches leave em lookin like bums, My raps cause Heron dishevelling
I do it for laughs or for the cash, like Curtis I get money, im Enron embezzling
Dudes think their hard, I shit on ya morals, Better yet I been Laughin at ya scruples
u`ll see a black hole, like my mirror when the Methamphetamines Attackin ma pupils
Where is he?,
Gnarls Barkley! no one can tell ya coz Cee low, im dirtier than the favellas in Rio
This some Lyrical evil, Im so sick like Neyo, a terrorist threat, Mandela`s my hero
I already proved it, aint no predicate im raw, fuck em, There aint no etiquette in war
Get some chico to medicate ya jaw, they aint breakin nothing, their celibate with law
Give me feed if you want, I don't really give a fuck, time`s choked my vanity spree
Crazy? You cant joke my sanity plea, stay blazin! touch me I`ll smoke ya family tree
punchlines! Like the groom I retain my title, fuck them, Smash if any launch the hate
It`s An eye for an eye, go blame the bible, I`ll leave em in half a semi conscious state
Hung drawn and quartered, leave the dumb gone n slaughted, bitch ya nights done
I stay dressed in black like Slick Ricks right one, lyrical heavyweight, im fit ta fight Pun
My life is like a movie, but Ima stick to that the hard shit, u cant see Cee`s emotions
Battlin a year with declining devotion, Im "board" with battles like RapBB promotions
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Post by Gutta »

Gnarls Barkley! no one can tell ya coz Cee low, im dirtier than the favellas in Rio
This some Lyrical evil, Im so sick like Neyo, a terrorist threat, Mandela`s my hero

I stay dressed in black like Slick Ricks right one, lyrical heavyweight, im fit ta fight Pun

Ay this piece was Str8, i liked those lines up there i liked the Favella line, cuz i dont think 2 many dudes kno wat that is, and it was incorporated well into that bar

and the slick rick line was dope haha

either way, piece was legit, 7.7/10 keep dropping
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Post by Arvincible »

Give me feed if you want, I don't really give a fuck, time`s choked my vanity spree
Crazy? You cant joke my sanity plea, stay blazin! touch me I`ll smoke ya family tree

nice shit mang

My life is like a movie, but Ima stick to that the hard shit, u cant see Cee`s emotions
Battlin a year with declining devotion, Im "board" with battles like RapBB promotions

really good stuff right there.

Ur gettin sicker by the verse fucker.

i give it an 8/10.

leave me feed cuz im on a writers block and i cant think lol
need some help
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Post by Brah-Vo »

This shit was sick!
Im lovin the wordplay
Multis was tight and ur flow was dope.

This was a dope piece my dude.
Im impressed.
8/10
Aka Raiza Sharp, R.A.I
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Post by complexity »

I don't know if I feel the same level of dopeness some of the previous "critics" do.

I'd give it a 7 out of 10.

"punchlines! Like the groom I retain my title, fuck them, Smash if any launch the hate "

You had good wordplay.

I just couldn't catch the flow and lost interest.

Keep it up though.
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