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somethin to do(another off the top)

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i drop lyrics to rot spirits, spiritually rot ya minds numerically like some kind of mathematician that's positions to have conditions of gettin half a vision to rap n listen about crap that's missin, like pieces to a puzzle, another thesis to be guzzled, n now im pissed so as my hand reaches for the muzzle, the other one "fist fucks the shit out of u" till there's feces on my knuckles, shit shat n shun to split splat n run, like these sentences with no completion, yet purposely done like menaces that flow with reason, another weatherman that controls the season, from a blisterin hot pause to a motion freezin, literally this is literature to be written with defecation, just like half of u bastards who ain't spittin with elevation, and if u do, chances r when u face me i'll be rippin ya dedication, most of u too retarded to be sippin the medication, so overdose n i'll prepare ya death bed, from meth n led cuasin ya lungs to bleed enough to turn ya breath red, wat was once unheard of is now left said
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Post by complexity »

" n now im pissed so as my hand reaches for the muzzle, the other one "fist fucks the shit out of u" till there's feces on my knuckles"

LMAO.

Not a bad drop for off the top. Good rhyming, etc.

Keep it up.
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Post by Haz »

like half of u bastards who ain't spittin with elevation, and if u do, chances r when u face me i'll be rippin ya dedication, most of u too retarded to be sippin the medication, so overdose n i'll prepare ya death bed, from meth n led cuasin ya lungs to bleed enough to turn ya breath red,






Good way 2 end it.
Decent drop overrall
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Post by WeirdSense »

"shit shat n shun to split splat n run"

I liked this rhyme scheme and woulda liked to see more on that flow. Pretty smooth reading throughout and some good visuals.

7.5/10 this was a good off the top to read on my boring ass easter sunday. Keep it up.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

haha appreciate it.. im trying to get into the freestyling again considering i originally did live text battles in a chat server and this forum brings me down..knowing i have time to write.. i get lazy about it...rather when im on the clock u got no time to waste n procrastinate
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Post by Typeo »

I liked it, specially the spit red line. Dope shit.

And about the whole lazy thing, same thing happened to me. Now that I have time I just don't wanna do it even though I want to write something to beat someone. Its just not the same as it was.

BTW - I like your pink text TGIF.
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