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[Haz]

Da Kid A Sick Legend In My Scripcha-iz-Aidz
Stayin On Point When Flowin Piccha-A-Blade
Got a Cleanup Crew No Needa Gitcha-a-Maid
Me you Cant C-Plus Like Dood Sayin ima Hitcha-Wid-Gradez
Son u Sweet As Hell Like a Filld Pitcha-Wid-Maid
I Got Sour-Goonz Who'll Make ya Last Hour-Soon
Griminess Empowerz-Loonz Money givez Dem-Power-Fuemz
they "Blow it Off" when they Pull-Back Lyk dey wusnt Servd a Full-Sack
My Goon'z Let The A.K.-Spray Throwin Are Hoodup like we Da K.K.K
Dey.Make.Way 2 Get Rida ya Body den Hurricane Cris sayz "AY."BAY.BAY"
Cruisin-2-Da-Ocean Callin Homeboy "Roachie" cus we "Loosin-Wud-We-Smokin"
Ha..Yall Takin-Jabz? They the "Pigs 6 Pack" like Dey Da "Bacins Abs"..
im Leave it At im Waitin Fa AUDI..YO "a front he "Is Really" Thought i wus SAUDI BRO?!

[Arvincible]

Son u Sweet As Hell Like a Filld Pitcha-Wid-Maid
I Got Sour-Goonz Who'll Make ya Last Hour-Soon


real smart lines man that was my favorite part

i like how you also made your wordplay much easier to catch. the quicker the better.
your multis were decent but the flow is a bit off, idk though thats just me.
And your shit is short too but its also an entertaining read everytime man
im tired of reading long drops anyways!

good shit hazard keep it up

[|.R.SON.aLL.|]

Lmfao ..
Koo ass Drop ..
Loved Tha First Few Bars ..
You Gettin Better Fam ..
Ya Multies are Makin Sense and Shit ..
Steppin ya Shit Up

[physics-ill]

Woah!

Language arts is essential to being a good writer in any field. I\\\\\\\'d suggest brushing up on your english. I\\\\\\\'ve seen some inspirational writers on this site - I\\\'d not place you in this category yet. You need to relax when you\\\\\\\'re writing and let your pure thoughts flourish. A lot of your rhymes come off as forced and the figures of speech are mostly subversive irony with limited creativity. I would differentiate with Arvincible - the wit of the rhymes displayed were below average as a compliment. Your articulation needs vast improvement. I respect the gangster rap style. We have greats like Ice Cube, who have demonstrated on a consistent basis the cleverness and emotion. Personally, I grew up in California and I understand the life style, although I didn\\\\\\\'t live it. You will soon be able to criticize me. I don\\\\\\\'t place myself on any sort of pedestal. I as well use unique expressions and wording to get across my point. I think, embracing the language and the roots of it - while using the strength of vowels and pronunciation will make you a lot more formidable of a writer.

I\'d like to apologize for the slashes near the apostrophes. My laptop is a pile of junk.

[Haz]

Ay Dats Constructive Critism
you Have your Own Opinion Simple As Dat..
I Dont Agree With It But I Dont Got Nothin Against it


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