WAX LYRICAL

[Cee4]

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Ya boy got diction, I am the truth, devoid of fiction
Aint avoidin friction, bring it, I`ll destroy ya bitchin
Give life to cry babies, severed ties like an umbilical
Cat sweeps, that's ma ritual, expose pussys I 'wax lyrical'
I am that miracle, rap criminal coz ive stabbed physicals
Satirical, add spiritual, I am evolution, I`ve past biblical
Past historical, back to the future here, at last an oracle
Knowledge astronomical, dumb ass I`ll smash ya logical
Make it acid rain on these hoes, my flows meteorological
Media chronicles, im bad news, go sleep in the hospital..
Now relax marijuana hits, then react with ma lava spits,
Back with the karma bitch, snap, like a pack of Piranha fish
Like a Jap with a camera quick, I snack like Jeff Dahmer did
Im white but
Black with Obama tints, their trapped coz ma grammar sick
Sip Remy, im Pap coz I father kids, mo sons than Osama shit
Down my booze then im striking, to you I am lightning
Push it to the limit like a Muslim man wifing
Lyrical 'hollows cost' like it's Jews that im fighting
For you it aint rightful to smash, u need a bible to bash
Surgery, I`ll turn ya vitals to mash n take ya title like Nas



Haha Nas had to change his album title
leave a link and i`ll return any feed

[Chicago]

Hella Multies real talk

I liked this piece because the multies were so strong u really aint need alotta punches. The few there were iight and the flow and structure was good. I paricularly like this line:


Cat sweeps, that's ma ritual, expose pussys I 'wax lyrical'

Nice shit homie

-!$Chicago$!

[- Mutual -]

Cat sweeps, that's ma ritual, expose pussys I 'wax lyrical'
I am that miracle, rap criminal coz ive stabbed physicals

thats my fav bit nice multies kept on point and nice flow
keep'em comin

[complexity]

I have mixed feelings about this piece.

"Cat sweeps, that's ma ritual, expose pussys I 'wax lyrical'
I am that miracle, rap criminal coz ive stabbed physicals
Satirical, add spiritual, I am evolution, I`ve past biblical
Past historical, back to the future here, at last an oracle
Knowledge astronomical, dumb ass I`ll smash ya logical "

that was extremely unique coming from you. The flow was perfect and the vocabulary worked excellently.

"Now relax marijuana hits, then react with ma lava spits,
Back with the karma bitch, snap, like a pack of Piranha fish
Like a Jap with a camera quick, I snack like Jeff Dahmer did
Im white but
Black with Obama tints, their trapped coz ma grammar sick"

That's a bunch of rhyming, but not really saying much. The concepts don't go together well at all.

"For you it aint rightful to smash, u need a bible to bash
Surgery, I`ll turn ya vitals to mash n take ya title like Nas "

Another pretty dope line despite the fact that Nas is pronounced NAWWWWS.

I actually like it when people think outside of the box and try new things. It was a cool piece to read.

Next time, when you're doing something like this. Try not to rhyme fish, bitch, snack, jap, quick, and did.

I'll bet you, if you rhymed larger words. You would have sailed through them lines and had a 9/10 piece instead of 8/10.