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LoL Some Random Ish...My Astral Time Travel State Of Mind...

Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

Take A Trip Inside My Astral Planes...
My World Is Too Complexed And Way More Insane Then what You Ass Holes Claim...


My Mental Complex My Mind Rattles Through Time Travel,I Grind Gravel Into Pieces With Telekinesis,
Ya Rebel In A Sequence,But If It Hell That Ya Seekin,This Spirited Lyricist Leaves U With A Delicate Thesis,
Listen Up Cuz This Drop Gets More Strange Then What Pedophiles Be Tellin They Nieces,My IQ Increases,
So Bro If Ya Havin It Brought,With An Antagonist Thought It Ain A Thing To Bring Beams 2 Blast In Ya Corpse,
I Capture The Hype Men,Then Rapture His Mic Stand,No Fright But By 2night I'll Have A Mag To His Pipe DAMN!,
I Can Tell Ya In For,A Beatin,Den Take Ya Jewls & Sell Dem For Cent's More,U been To Jail Or Pin...Sure(Neva Dat)
Ya Girl Candy Available Like Seven Eleven Conven Stores,
Im Human But I'm Horsin Around Ye Bitch I'm Hell Of A Centaur (Lmaoo...)


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Post by Dead Silence »

wow. real good shit man. keep this shit up
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Post by - Mutual - »

man i loved it nice multies and concept
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by MagicMark »

lol, multis and flow were solid

multis could have been a bit more crisp and repetitive to help flow more so, but still nice

pedo concept good, centaur cool aswell....

content and vocab was nice...

a little bit longer would have been cool


good job
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Post by Arvincible »

Yeah man this mess was dope.

The pedophilic line was funny! Had me rollin.


Overall good piece nigga
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"My Mental Complex My Mind Rattles Through Time Travel,I Grind Gravel Into Pieces With Telekinesis,
Ya Rebel In A Sequence,But If It Hell That Ya Seekin,This Spirited Lyricist Leaves U With A Delicate Thesis"

By far one of my favorite lines in the scriptures in a while.

The rest was so-so, one really dope punchline would have made it even better.

Overall 8/10
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