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Seven Bars Of Fire

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Endured Many Stitches And Scars B, From Pitchin The Hard G
To Whippin The Rari, Jewels Glisten Like Stars B,
Got Riches And Cars See, Kids Wishing They Are Me
Cuz I'm Bringin In More Chips Than Fat Bitches At Parties

I Got The Block Hot, You're Not Ock, I Cop Drops
You're Drops Flop Cuz Once The Glocks Stocked
And The Shots Pop, Your Times Out like a Broken Stop Watch
My Lines Have All These Kids Trippin Like Retards Playin Hopskotch

Rhymes Daft And Dark, Pulling Strings I'll Laugh While Ya Harp
I Had The Passionate Start, Grasped At The Heart
Takin Rap As An Art, Pushin Fishscale, That Means I'm Trafficin Carp
Cuz When I Hop Out The Whip They Call It A National Park

Ridin Peanut Butter, Its Scippy Bitch, Handle The Jelly In A Jiffy Kid
A Bear To These Cowards, On My Grizzly Shit, I Get Busy Quick
And My Wrists Be Sick, Bitches Hips Be Thick, And Tits Be It
Shit I'll Spit Game, The Bitch'll Say Remember The Titan Like A Disney Flick

Scips Shines Sickenin, My Grinds Viscous, A Sign Of Sickness
Like Clocks On The Wall, Ya Times Ticken, For Ya Fine Mistress
Ya Games Nice? That's Why No One Sees It Like Spittin To Blind Bitches
I'm So Hard I'll Give You Blue Balls Just From My Writtens

This Guys Wack, Punches With Rhymes Leavin Ya Spine Cracked
Scips Heard Through The Wire Like My Lines Tapped,
Cuz When Theres Drama, I'm Lurkin With The Llama, Like Searchin For Osama
I'll Walk Around With Guns, Call Me Lex Luger The Way I Rack

I'll Cripple B This Man In/Manning Pressure I'm Bring The Nickel D
Or Maybe The Dime Duke, Ya Rhymes Poop, I Rhyme Truth
My Lines Loose, Find Me In The Lime Coup, I'm So Co Sure/Kosher
The Drops Fittin About Nine Jews, Spittin Lyrical Hype, Its High Proof
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Post by Arvincible »

Lmao@ "your lines poop"!

Damn, I haven't read a script in a while...

Good shit, some great inner rhymes leading to the punch,
Flow's improved, multies were decent especially on the 'national park' bar, loved the retard hopscotch bar, shit was the best u brought, had me rollin.

Only prob was excess fillers kinda hurt my eyes..it takes forever to get to the punch.

Only thing else I gotta say is work on the delivery. Nice read and keep it comin
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good looks uppin
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Was a Nice Drop Son ..
And Yeah i`ll Have to agree Wit Arv ..
But I Disagree at Tha Same Time ..
Cus Scip`s Multies and inner Rhymin Made Up For it ..
And Made Tha Flow More Complex ..
I Was Feelin This Drop ..
It Was Good Fam ..

S.a.w Up!
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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thanks b

lookin for more feed than the crew (no hate)

S.A.W All Day

Cuttin Heads Off...Like Decapatation
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Post by - Mutual - »

nice stayed on point
nice flow
nice multies
8/10
was pretty good

Rhymes Daft And Dark, Pulling Strings I'll Laugh While Ya Harp
I Had The Passionate Start, Grasped At The Heart
Takin Rap As An Art, Pushin Fishscale, That Means I'm Trafficin Carp
Cuz When I Hop Out The Whip They Call It A National Park

my fave bit^
kep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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thanks mutual...uppin
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Post by Haz »

This Was Pretty Decent Homie
Thought You Had a Few Played Punches
Mainly The Ones That Have 2 Do With Clocks. And Da Remember Da Titan 1



This Guys Wack, Punches With Rhymes Leavin Ya Spine Cracked
Scips Heard Through The Wire Like My Lines Tapped,
Cuz When Theres Drama, I'm Lurkin With The Llama, Like Searchin For Osama
I'll Walk Around With Guns, Call Me Lex Luger The Way I Rack

I'll Cripple B This Man In/Manning Pressure I'm Bring The Nickel D
Or Maybe The Dime Duke, Ya Rhymes Poop, I Rhyme Truth
My Lines Loose, Find Me In The Lime Coup, I'm So Co Sure/Kosher
The Drops Fittin About Nine Jews, Spittin Lyrical Hype, Its High Proof


Them 2 Pieces Of ya Verse Was My Favorite Part..
And I Liked The Carp Shit ... Keep Droppin Scip...
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Post by Scip »

someone actually was feelin the Fishscale Trafficin Carp line...word

haha and that i rack bars my favorite of the whole thing

good look haz

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Post by Çhåiñ$âw »

Good shit Scip. Sick with the multies. Flow got a little rubbery in a couple spots, but that's normal for text drops, as we all read them a little differently. Punches were tight aside from a played concept or 2. Overall this is a great piece. Much respect.
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Rhymes Daft And Dark, Pulling Strings I'll Laugh While Ya Harp
I Had The Passionate Start, Grasped At The Heart
Takin Rap As An Art, Pushin Fishscale, That Means I'm Trafficin Carp
Cuz When I Hop Out The Whip They Call It A National Park
^^^^
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overall a good piece. crazy with the multis and i noticed u changed the structure a bit which made it easier to read. a couple punches werea bit played such as the fat bitches/chips one but on the whole this was dope
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good looks cee

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Post by HKX »

dis shit was decent u had sum good lines on here much props
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Post by Bobby Star »

You had a Nice flow,
Nice multies,
decent punches
imma giv it 8/10
Nice read !
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