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Myswell get some feed on this..

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This is my verse vs Teqnike since he quacked..would appreciate any feed..

Kid Il Leave You Sore As Hell!,Right Hooks Got Ya Looking Torn And Swell!
We Know Teqnike Aint Immortal,Unless His Names Felipe Coronel!
Il Leave You Beat Bad!After This Battle You'll Drop Ya Pen And No Longer Seek Pads!
Ya Text Styles Like Gary Sheffeild At The Plate..Cuz We Know Teqnike's Bad!
So Step And Get Wrecked Man,Battle Dress?Well You'll Be Left Damned..
Im Like To Many Bullets In The Chamber..YUP! Im Leaving Tech Jammed!
Watch Dress Smack A Bitch,Kid You Acting Sick But Are WACK AS SHIT!
In The Battle Im Destroying Tech Like A Damn Omish Actavist!
I Suggest You Lay Low,Its Ironic How In A Battle You Got Gay Blows
Only If This Bitch Hired,A Crew Full Of Dickriders He'd Get A K.O.!


Btw Felipe Coronel is Immortal Technique
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well some nice punches i liked the flow
shit was tight this coulda been a sick battle but well
keep doin ya thing
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Thanks..props on the feedback I was really hoping he would of dropped
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Post by Dead Silence »

good shit..

nice nameplay

u killed it with that shit.

woulda been nice to see this battle go down

vote in me and tramatiks battle please :-D
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