...says incredible 6 months later...

Yeah i liked it, u gotta great flow i must say.

Good use of multies...

Idk wut feedback i can give ya really, its all good 2 me

Link is der

It was all good but i dont think burnign and burgers rhyme lol.
Keep it up was fun 2 read =D

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/post46098.html#46098

I have AdHd so i wrote this on a beat that i dont know lol. I didnt get alot of time to write it cuz my laptop is broken and this is my dads pc and he cant kno i rap blablablablabla...... i wrote it in a hurry here is it:


U know me, It's ADHD ...

kool keep it up every1 else already said wht i was gonna say

then let him do that if u dont pay attention to him he'll stop cuz next time he says u was makin fun of him with pics so he says more about u and so it keeps on going

Big p why u startin again....look at ur sig..

Big P- "LEAVE ME THE FUCK ALONE, WHY ARE YOU GUYS MESSING WITH MY MIND?"-thanks

Yeh if u post pics like that they wont leave u alone dude

iight lol

At least u Finallllyyyy using multies like i said u and teached u how to u use em lol. Only thing u needa work on is syllables... make sure the syllables are alright... i'll explain it futher on msn

Thanks alot for ya'll feed it will definitly help me and chea 1 year ... i've had some times i didnt rap 4 a while... some times i rapped ALOT.... havent improved alot lately tho

Thanks dude

ok well since u only wrote the second verse imma read that only....

u should make all your lines the same lenght, and use loads more multies lol. There where basicly 2 bars with multies... make every bar with a multie

Use 16 lines instead of 14.....

like dj said, use more syllable rhymes and get ...

Cool thanks

LINK = http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/post43932.html#43932

Ok i've been rapping for 1 year exactly 2day lol!! I wrote a new spit... and imma be more active from NOW on lol

when I wake-here, I be Like shakespeare cuz i make-fear
Drama In poetic-visions, That's me cracking, i break-here ...