yeh it was good.. it was dark and descriptive.. overall a good read,

pea2e

Yeh thanks for takin' the time out and readin' it.. and to the first comment... it's never forced bruv.. i wouldn't write if I had to force it or try too hard lol.. but good lookin' out..

Still lookin' for thoughts on it

respect's on readin' my work Arvincible

Follow me on this one. it goes like...,

I got this problem... as fast as it settled in, I couldn't solve it../
Fumbled with it, the puzzle wouldn't fit.. I swear, I could've lost it../
I did lose it,.. at least that's what the voice tells me../
Sick of holdin' on to this spliff when all else fails ...

you show alot of flexiblility with words, it was creative as hell too duke,
you also got an gutta/abstract flow which kind've makes it hard to read at first, which i can relate too, but once you read it, it was worth it

personal fav bars:

"This Makes me More "Alive Den Ever" im Always in the Storm ...

Feedback much appreciated boys, thanks for takin' the time out to readin my work, means a lot..

I got my eyes open for all your work as well

I liked it it duke.. read smoothly... was consistant, and I felt the topic matter..
butter son,

pea2e

rhymes where alrite... you got nice structure n' shit.... .. but what you so mad at? lol.. no hate, but the whole peice was jus' un-focused anger.. why you so angry duke lol?

ya i use that site once n' awhile, i dropped a couple familiar bars there and got zero feedback..

so i took it back to the lab, re-structured it and dropped it.. good lookin' out

Ayo, this is my first drop on this site, been kinda feelin' like..

Her impressions mis-leadin', like "hi, I'm leaving"../
Like impressions in cement, that I wish I could sleep in../
Like confessions of content I wish I could speak with../
I wish I could leave with more than half I came with../
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