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Subsist - Kurse of Viral (diss)
There you go.. Feeedback
Last edited by Subsist on Fri Nov 24, 2006 5:55 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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I'll give credit where credit is due. The instrumental...yea...I feel that. Shit was bangin...sounded kinda serious...but nigga...you got no flow. Maybe it was the accent...or the lack or talent...I dunno. But atleast ur shit was clearer than Demented Dickheads shit...so I'll give u props for dat. Overall diss-wise though...nah...I don't feel threatened or burnt. Close...but no cigar.
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since you're typically humble i won't be too harsh
like kurse said, the beat is ill, but your lyrics weren't quite up to par a basic rhyme scheme and no real creative lines, your flow isn't fluid at all you fall offbeat alot, your enunciation isn't bad for an arab but it still needs some work(enunciation is how clear you say words) your emotion is lacking too you sound like your just talking
basically you need alot of practice just try to record as much as you can as practice and you'll gradually start to get better
like kurse said, the beat is ill, but your lyrics weren't quite up to par a basic rhyme scheme and no real creative lines, your flow isn't fluid at all you fall offbeat alot, your enunciation isn't bad for an arab but it still needs some work(enunciation is how clear you say words) your emotion is lacking too you sound like your just talking
basically you need alot of practice just try to record as much as you can as practice and you'll gradually start to get better
Last edited by drunken jesus on Sat Nov 25, 2006 5:08 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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the times when you pause or rush lines i'm not gonna listen and give all the exact times
just try to be more fluid, you don't have to hit every snare to be on beat, just try to get a better sense of rhythm so when you flow it sounds natural and so it doesn't sound rushed and have awkward pauses, writing bars with around the same amount of syllables will help with that too
just try to be more fluid, you don't have to hit every snare to be on beat, just try to get a better sense of rhythm so when you flow it sounds natural and so it doesn't sound rushed and have awkward pauses, writing bars with around the same amount of syllables will help with that too
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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kurse...of?...viral diss...n im supposed to feel threatened?...i didnt listen to it..and for the fact that u cant even get the subject title right...im not gonna listen to it..especially addin on da reviews....but ummm nice goin..LOL.....n i havent even been here in like 5 days...HAAAA wata joke
P.S. i listened...if u rapped as good as da beats u used id feel hurt...lol and i couldnt understand much wit ur mumblin n grumblin...n u cant kill a virus wit antibiotics....HAAA!!...
P.S. i listened...if u rapped as good as da beats u used id feel hurt...lol and i couldnt understand much wit ur mumblin n grumblin...n u cant kill a virus wit antibiotics....HAAA!!...


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Sorry Gaysist...but you didn't. I heard 1...maybe 2 things that might've applied to me...and maybe 2 that applied to Viral...the rest was all camel-jibber. In otherwords you talked about nuthin. So yea...sorry...you didn't school me in that department either. Don't believe!? Ask around.Subsist wrote:I had more personals in there than all the random ass shit disses you ever wrote all together.
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Sorry Gaysist...but you didn't. I heard 1...maybe 2 things that might've applied to me...and maybe 2 that applied to Viral...the rest was all camel-jibber. In otherwords you talked about nuthin. So yea...sorry...you didn't school me in that department either. Don't believe!? Ask around.Subsist wrote:I had more personals in there than all the random ass shit disses you ever wrote all together.
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