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n anotha one!!

Post by Quix »

KeyStyyyyyylE!!!!!








I'm missunderstooD! i only preach what i know, Conceived from a home
believed to be prone, to dah streetz and dah chrome, selling weed and dah coke
inexchange for some change cuz we Reep what we soe,
Insane and a bit strange and was conceived in the snow
now i'm relieved that you know, i can PRoceed and just Flow!
i'm forseeing you crook, in your street from dah scope
now dah fiegnz at dah Beef are greeting yah ghost,
your team is weak, Defeat have them retreating dah most!
Deseased from a poke, whether it be the cheek or the throat!
Real Recognize Real ... who dah Fuck is you???

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Re: n anotha one!!

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damm the multies was fire
the whole piece is dope
this has to be one of the best drops
i've ever read from you it needs to be longer
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Re: n anotha one!!

Post by Phasewon »

yeah this shit was on point with the multies, but a standard verse is at least 16 bars, this came in at an uneven nine bars? which takes away from the authenticity of the shit for me, only crit' I can give, is just work on counting bars and learn the basic structure of a verse, but other than that, multies, flow, it was definitely ill in terms of all that shit, stay droppin' and stay elevating.
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