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Re: Attack of the killer class clown from outerspace!

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bump till I really read it...shit's hella long
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Re: Attack of the killer class clown from outerspace!

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Like the bullshit, I kept getting older, started writing at the age of six/
It was the closest thing I ever had to the help substitute these violent relationships.../
So I stuck it out w/ my imagination, which was more of a vacation than a last resort/
It's all I had, like the little bit of hallway light every night from when I cracked the door/
I just wanna be a seed who can grow past the dirt, n' feel the sun/
Realize now days, dreams might be fake to most, but are still real to some/


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Re: A Fish In Its Bowl.

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bump again...my bad bro
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Re: A Fish In Its Bowl.

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Long read but worth it. Good imagery and a lot of emotion in this. A few rhymes felt forced but over all they don't detract from the piece as a whole.
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