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Track originally was with my boy, he went first and spit 24 bars and then I went second and spit 24 bars. This is just my 24 bars. Feedback is greatly appreciated I'm still trying to get the hang of recording.
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Its Kinda Loud...But The Flow Is Def Tight... Might Wanna Lower Your Vocals A Lil Tho... Nice Punch Lines And Metaphores.... Flow Is On Point Too And I Also Like The Beat...Its Amped Up ...Good Drop Bro...WOuld Like To Hear More From U With Better Quality
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Yeah, lower the vocals like that guy said. This was dope though, rhymes were good and the flow/delivery made the rhymes even sound better. You kind of forced some rhymes at the end but its all good.
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Post by AbZ The Beast »

solid verse my dude..flow was nice, with some nice lines laced in there.
drop a complete track homie
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Post by HKX »

yea def lower ur vocals man beat was decent... not sure if it's jus me but u sound like dis dude name Dosia style sounds da same 2 dats jus me tho. Flow was decent good use sum work overall it was a decent drop man keep droppin'
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