Welcome to Illest Lyrics forum established in 2005.
----
Free Vapes

My first drop

Drop your written rhymes in one of the largest collections of original rhymes on the internet. The feedback in our Written Rhymes section will simply amaze you.

Moderators: Loon E Lou, Enlightend

Post Reply
User avatar
~*Blitz*~
Illest # 1 Liar
Offline
Posts: 718
Joined: Sat Jan 06, 2007 9:13 am
Wins: 9
Losses: 2

My first drop

Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

http://illestlyrics.com/board/post20326.html#20326
http://illestlyrics.com/board/these-vessels-vt3290.html
http://illestlyrics.com/board/post20330.html#20330
http://illestlyrics.com/board/post20331.html#20331

Im sick of the hatin`, and the beef y'all creatin'/ Mother Fuckers... I'm done procrastinatin', Its time for you to be disinigrating
Im here ta clear my name, and murder this trash you call "game"/ That I believe is hella lame, My lord - what a fucken shame…
That it had to come to this, bottom line drawn you wont exsist/ after im done with this diss, all you'll have left is to reminisce
Bout the days before I killed you, back when you made your debut/ but now your writings through, and this shit was long overdue
I just put a slash in your heart, and ripped your soul a-fucken-part/ and if you hadda been smart, you woulda never beefed with me from tha start
Ill wrap this up with some advice, my words are as cold as fucken ice/ they wont leave you thinking twice, that everything I just said was precise
Last edited by ~*Blitz*~ on Sun Jan 28, 2007 6:15 pm, edited 1 time in total.
User avatar
Lawgix
The Aphilliated Assasin
Offline
Posts: 4214
Joined: Thu Sep 21, 2006 3:25 pm
Wins: 14
Losses: 8

Post by Lawgix »

that was a tight drop ms Blitz... keep that shit comin girl!!! flat out... peace!!!!
Don't Let The Game Make U, Make Urself

Lawgix

Illest Radio

Image

"Sometimes You Gotta Stand By Your Failures To Recognize Your Success" Joe Budden

pest wrote:You look Easy... Whats Good?
AntiMaTTer wrote:lmao ...is this how you hit on all the chicks?
Haz
Supreme Lyricist
Offline
Posts: 6800
Joined: Mon Dec 18, 2006 1:41 am
Wins: 67
Losses: 70
Location: The Port

Post by Haz »

You Need To Put a Link That u Lef Feed Back On
N Post it Before Your Verse Jus So Feed Back Gets Around Fa Everyone N U Get More
Image
Haz
Supreme Lyricist
Offline
Posts: 6800
Joined: Mon Dec 18, 2006 1:41 am
Wins: 67
Losses: 70
Location: The Port

Post by Haz »

Yea it Was Nice .... U Got Potential

Lines Dat Stuck Out : I just put a slash in your heart, and ripped your soul a-fucken-part/ and if you hadda been smart, you woulda never beefed with me from tha start
Image
User avatar
~*Blitz*~
Illest # 1 Liar
Offline
Posts: 718
Joined: Sat Jan 06, 2007 9:13 am
Wins: 9
Losses: 2

Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

lol thanks it was my first attempt at rapping

I also edited the post and added some links where i gave feed back - my bad on that i totally wasnt thinking when i posted this
User avatar
Lawgix
The Aphilliated Assasin
Offline
Posts: 4214
Joined: Thu Sep 21, 2006 3:25 pm
Wins: 14
Losses: 8

Post by Lawgix »

no worries honestly... u could have done in the future... after u posted ur drop... its no biggie really
Don't Let The Game Make U, Make Urself

Lawgix

Illest Radio

Image

"Sometimes You Gotta Stand By Your Failures To Recognize Your Success" Joe Budden

pest wrote:You look Easy... Whats Good?
AntiMaTTer wrote:lmao ...is this how you hit on all the chicks?
User avatar
Mac
Rap King
Offline
Posts: 968
Joined: Fri Nov 17, 2006 2:06 pm
Wins: 9
Losses: 2

Post by Mac »

Damn , I Hope She Don't Call Me Out. lol Good Shit
B E Z ~
User avatar
-TraMaTiK-
Unstoppable Emcee
Offline
Posts: 2046
Joined: Fri Oct 13, 2006 7:59 am
Wins: 6
Losses: 17

Post by -TraMaTiK- »

Im here ta clear my name, and murder this trash you call "game"/ That I believe is hella lame, My lord - what a fucken shame…
That it had to come to this, bottom line drawn you wont exsist/ after im done with this diss, all you'll have left is to reminisce


lovin that part..its simplistic yet good u no..nice stay droppin -1-
User avatar
Borat
Lazy Ass
Offline
Posts: 802
Joined: Mon Mar 06, 2006 10:25 am
Wins: 1
Losses: 2
No Shows: 1

Post by Borat »

not bad... that is all.
POET OF THE YEAR 2011
Image
I'm often soft like cotton but my message is clear, my words hold weight like "dumbos" ears.
Image
Image
User avatar
LadieHazard
Rhyme Master
Offline
Posts: 193
Joined: Tue Jan 23, 2007 6:05 am
Wins: 1
Losses: 5

Post by LadieHazard »

Ya shit is popin ma Thas whassup u Do da damn Thang i enjoyed readin it u got skill Keep doin u cant wait to see more post
Think iM Trippin? Tie Ma Shoe...
Cant Stand me? Sit the fuck Down...
Cant Face me? Then Turn the Fuck around...

u Cant Break The Bitch That Thinkz Nothin Of u!
User avatar
~*Blitz*~
Illest # 1 Liar
Offline
Posts: 718
Joined: Sat Jan 06, 2007 9:13 am
Wins: 9
Losses: 2

Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

Thanks to everyone who left feedback - I really appreciate your points of view and what not.
User avatar
Borat
Lazy Ass
Offline
Posts: 802
Joined: Mon Mar 06, 2006 10:25 am
Wins: 1
Losses: 2
No Shows: 1

Post by Borat »

keyword.. "what not" .. that was directed at me haha
POET OF THE YEAR 2011
Image
I'm often soft like cotton but my message is clear, my words hold weight like "dumbos" ears.
Image
Image
Post Reply

Return to “Written Rhymes”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 5 guests