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Bitches may or may not feel-`mah-`flow
jus coz they vets they think they can try and steal-`my-`show .//.

im asian so they call me the ching chong china-`man
wheres the chivalry when u shootin me down when im tryna-`stand .//.

tryna break-`me-`down, like blood hounds they tryna hunt-`me-down
they call me River, aka lake-`its u ill-`drown they still lookin for something when i aint make no sound .//.

damit fuckin domino get off my-`ass see,
your always so fucking high so just fly-`past me .//.

i squashed beefs with hazard and cee4
but why does domino keep comin up like he plastered-`to my-`door .//.

shit bitch ive been tryna be patient turnin-`the other-`cheek
your more fuckin annoying then a retarded bird, quit flappin-ya-`beak .//.

you changed my title to sum ting wong-`wit-`me
im here for the long run, im channelin-`positive lyrical-`chi .//.

what makes it right ta racially slur asians, whose stereotypes are more played then pac-`man
but its obviously a crime punishable by death to racially slur a black-`man .//.

yeh yeh ill probably get even more hate for this-`verse
ha, maybe my shit is KURSED but if theres one thing this bitch-`has-`learned

its that EVERYBODY gets their TURN

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Not my best drop but hey. Lookin for feed.
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jus uppin.
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when did we have beef?
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yeah if this was aHALF SAD HALF ' diss ' to domino hazard cee4 then it was pretty weak, dont lie you cant feel sad and write a diss it just doesnt work. none of the less ill break it down again and tell you what was wrong about the drop .

Bitches may or may not feel-`mah-`flow
jus coz they vets they think they can try and steal-`my-`show .//.

your half getting multi's, witch is good .

im asian so they call me the ching chong china-`man
wheres the chivalry when u shootin me down when im tryna-`stand .//.

well no one really calls you the ' ching chong china man now do they, thats bending the truth a little bar was choopy, flow wasnt there witch is a big aspect

tryna break-`me-`down, like blood hounds they tryna hunt-`me-down
they call me River, aka lake-`its u ill-`drown they still lookin for something when i aint make no sound .//.

ok you tried to set it out like there was a multi coming, but from my eyes i sore none

damit fuckin domino get off my-`ass see,
your always so fucking high so just fly-`past me .//.

^ if that was wordplay you gotta practise .. but it's good to see you getting the basic concept of it

i squashed beefs with hazard and cee4
but why does domino keep comin up like he plastered-`to my-`door .//.

again. no multi

shit bitch ive been tryna be patient turnin-`the other-`cheek
your more fuckin annoying then a retarded bird, quit flappin-ya-`beak .//.

once again there was no multi. flapping-ya-beak and turning-the-other-cheek dont rhyme nor it makes sense.. how can u flap a beak? even if you are a bird

you changed my title to sum ting wong-`wit-`me
im here for the long run, im channelin-`positive lyrical-`chi .//.

just no.

what makes it right ta racially slur asians, whose stereotypes are more played then pac-`man
but its obviously a crime punishable by death to racially slur a black-`man .//.

^ you didnt really get ur concept BUT HEY THERES AN ACUTAL MULTI.


yeh yeh ill probably get even more hate for this-`verse
ha, maybe my shit is KURSED but if theres one thing this bitch-`has-`learned

lol .

overall this was a poor drop for your standards stay up.. fuck the haters on the real though.

you just do what u do everyone started out like this . there's nothing wrong with it ethier keep writting and keep elevating
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

SequencE wrote:yeah if this was aHALF SAD HALF ' diss ' to domino hazard cee4 then it was pretty weak, dont lie you cant feel sad and write a diss it just doesnt work. none of the less ill break it down again and tell you what was wrong about the drop .

Bitches may or may not feel-`mah-`flow
jus coz they vets they think they can try and steal-`my-`show .//.

your half getting multi's, witch is good .

im asian so they call me the ching chong china-`man
wheres the chivalry when u shootin me down when im tryna-`stand .//.

well no one really calls you the ' ching chong china man now do they, thats bending the truth a little bar was choopy, flow wasnt there witch is a big aspect

tryna break-`me-`down, like blood hounds they tryna hunt-`me-down
they call me River, aka lake-`its u ill-`drown they still lookin for something when i aint make no sound .//.

ok you tried to set it out like there was a multi coming, but from my eyes i sore none

damit fuckin domino get off my-`ass see,
your always so fucking high so just fly-`past me .//.

^ if that was wordplay you gotta practise .. but it's good to see you getting the basic concept of it

i squashed beefs with hazard and cee4
but why does domino keep comin up like he plastered-`to my-`door .//.

again. no multi

shit bitch ive been tryna be patient turnin-`the other-`cheek
your more fuckin annoying then a retarded bird, quit flappin-ya-`beak .//.

once again there was no multi. flapping-ya-beak and turning-the-other-cheek dont rhyme nor it makes sense.. how can u flap a beak? even if you are a bird

you changed my title to sum ting wong-`wit-`me
im here for the long run, im channelin-`positive lyrical-`chi .//.

just no.

what makes it right ta racially slur asians, whose stereotypes are more played then pac-`man
but its obviously a crime punishable by death to racially slur a black-`man .//.

^ you didnt really get ur concept BUT HEY THERES AN ACUTAL MULTI.


yeh yeh ill probably get even more hate for this-`verse
ha, maybe my shit is KURSED but if theres one thing this bitch-`has-`learned

lol .

overall this was a poor drop for your standards stay up.. fuck the haters on the real though.

you just do what u do everyone started out like this . there's nothing wrong with it ethier keep writting and keep elevating
dickhead^ i was gonna break it down..newayz do as he said,he pretty much broke it down decently
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