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Push It ...First Verse

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Push It ...First Verse

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Here's a little somethign i'm working on....the quality is shit..becuz my mic is lol there's still lots to be done..but tell me what u think of it so far ..
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don't like the hook

verse flow was alright, could switch it up a little bit though so its not so montone, try to rap with a little more charisma, towards the end of your bars you get quieter, beat doesn't mesh well with your voice really

i wouldn't ad any effects when you're recording on a shitty mic, that echo or reverb you put on it makes your voice sound robotic could just be your mic i dunno
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Post by Onediversekid »

lol thanks for theinfo..i will fix all of that shit ...write a new chorus ...thnks
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