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little verse my friend "emphasis" wrote.

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feedback would be nice, Enjoy.

I live without fear and I have no regrets.
I might shed a tear, if I cracked under the stress
I never second guess, when I’m pavin my steps,
You wanna follow in em' and I guarantee you'll wreck,
The older I get all the magic seems to fade,
Tragic what I once loved is now a distant shade,
Comments with hate are all I ever seem to trade,
Sure I got some love but it's narrowed down to eight.
I can only promise that I will never change,
It's gotten me this far even though I’m kinda strange.
I settled for bronze but I'm golden in brains,
I'm a virtual murderer I'll kill you in games.
Why change my ways when it’s all so great,
Sure I might be numb 'cause there's never no pain.
Never no strain, so nothin ever gets in the way,
I could be the kind of hero that never saves the day.

Lemons poured on by the gallons, the worlds so unforgiving, but if life wasn't a challenge then it wouldn't be worth living.
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Re: little verse my friend "emphasis" wrote.

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It was cool nothin' really special
but it was nice, didn't really get the concept right away
or maybe I just read it differently

but it was a good piece! keep writing....well


tell HIM to keep writing? relay the message

-- Mon Apr 12, 2010 11:12 am --

It was cool nothin' really special
but it was nice, didn't really get the concept right away
or maybe I just read it differently

but it was a good piece! keep writing....well


tell HIM to keep writing? relay the message
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Re: little verse my friend "emphasis" wrote.

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Thanks guys preciate the feed. I will return give ya'll some feed sometime today

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