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-TraMaTiK-
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The Flame

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there once was a flame..
that didnt have a spark..
a ray of light..
barely seen in the dark..
hope sitting on a tight rope..
.thinking thats like 'i might choke'..
.endless burning caused by passion...
and the temptation grew as each day was passin...
the flame grew bigger and the light you could see..
it stood out and i knew what this might be..
its the not the call of the wild..
or me falling apart..
its the strength of your love that guided my heart..
till this day and forever more..
ill be thankful for what you have done..
you showed me everything...
and kept the flame lit that was apart of my sun..

ye a short poem i made since i havent droppe nuffin in'a while..enjoy it or not...-PeaCe-
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

Simple and short, not alot to the content but still good, emotion coulda come out more but not bad for the length, keep em coming
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ty ty..ye it was sammy lol..but thankz...-1-
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Post by Spoof »

I agree with Blitz that the emotional part should've been stronger but it was good drop

I loved this one:
the flame grew bigger and the light you could see..
it stood out and i knew what this might be..
its the not the call of the wild..
or me falling apart..
its the strength of your love that guided my heart..

keep it coming!
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

word..thanks yall
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