those that go without harm learn nothing
those with tar in their arm earn something
experience is gained from a delirious brain thumping
heart racing and jumping fear of death is nothing

those that go without scars have a halfway heart
those with cuts that run deep see a different part
experience ...

absolute atrophy of mind body and soul
resolute to be all I can be find a common goal with these foes
I feel froze, bewildered, closed off and exposed
minds sealed lips don't utter anything of purpose and no one knows
no one cares to know I don't dare to show these demons
at night I hear them ...

just some alliteration practice....props for the critique

Dynamic drastic dialect deploys darts of intellect / determined to destroy dirty dignitaries of disrespect / dillusionary aspects of artistic atrophy divulge freely the decaying state of his sanity / as he worships vanitie's victims / and longs for vicarious soul systems / of surreal soundwaves ...

It cut and paste wrong should be more readable now...thank you all for the critique

we can go too mark if ya want

here we go


by the end of this you will be unrecognizable/
this kid suffers from anemia my "iron" fist is sizable/
I assist the suicidal with a rev. Jim Jones revival/
drink the kool-aid and save your little life from further anguish and exile/
I have more bloodied bodies to my name than an ...

calm down!!!!! lets keep this friendly...13 lines is fine....I'll drop first

6 bars is too short for me fam how bout 12-16

not my best work ... just tryin to get somthin up so i can battle...

"Let's go to your place"




I can't write/
I sit up all night staring a blank screen/
trying desperatly to figure out what my thoughts mean/
and then it happens/
involuntary movement of the keyboard/
sort of simalar to waves crashinon the seashore/
I think I'm just bored with being an unemployed ...

that is all

I don't care who I battle just somebody set a damn thread up

either or....or both....set it up...it won't let me start a thread cuz I'm too new.

I will battle anyone just say the word and set it up